The Odd Chronicles of Chi'kami Aizune (Entries Only)

[ChidoriOokami]

I am not sure where Kalyn fits into the story yet, but she appears to be someone who has lost her idealism where the Republic is concerned. The heads of government to blame, the blight comes from the top, hmmm, wonder where this will lead? It will be interesting to see this character as you flesh her out more in the chapters to come.

 

Hi Misha! Hmm yes it will be very interesting! I hope. In my disclaimer/index I kind of explain how the stories may not always closely cross each other but will for sure cross, and in the future probably cross many times at least in the way we saw Hovi (CS-2) If you guys ever have suggestions and later on ones having to do with any cameos...PM me!

 

 

I really like the journal entries; it's a very intimate perspective, but in a refreshing format.

 

The characters continue to build nicely. Looking forward to seeing what's next.

 

Thanks Wang I know it is kind of slow doing it this way...i read everyone else's stories and the chapters have so much depth, detail, star'noir and richness xD The more I read everyone's stories I feel like I'm needing to step up things including how often I can add entries ^^

[MishaCantu]

I know it is kind of slow doing it this way...i read everyone else's stories and the chapters have so much depth, detail, star'noir and richness xD The more I read everyone's stories I feel like I'm needing to step up things including how often I can add entries ^^[/

 

For now, the diary entries may fit what you are trying to convey. Later on, as the story progresses, and you want to go into more depth, they may not fit as well, only you as the writer can know that. I find the snippets pretty interesting right now, introducing each character in that way has worked thus far in keeping me engaged.

 

As for stepping things up, for me at least, it depends on what my muse is up to. Lately she has been hitting me over the head pretty hard and I tend to write a lot, but then I hit dry streaks where I actually have to take a break and can't post as often. It's not something that can be forced, I just have to take advantage when the mood strikes.

 

For others, they may do the words per day goal that they set, I know someone who only writes on Sunday, so it is different for everyone. Just do what works for you and so far it is working just fine.

[ChidoriOokami]

Entry #7 Loren Tan'Vay CS-3

Catagory: Short Story

 

Sanctuary at Last?

 

The hull of the ship was buzzing and groaning as it made its way across the thick and endless mass of emptiness. Small bits of old stars and planets, once mighty and steadfast with their positions in the dark ocean, wandered aimlessly about. Their collisions with the ship were merely a tickle – the new usurpers of this collection of dark silence were none other than products of the universe themselves.

 

Loren’s eyelids were debating with his mind as his lids moved towards each other, wishing to cover the white of his eyes and hide the very pupils which being fueled by his mind were dilating. A holo recording device lay on top the side table next to his bed. It lay near the same canteen that he had for so many mornings woken up to partake of.

 

He ran his fingers through his dark hair, his bangs now longer than he had ever had them—a result of laziness that tended to take over the mind as one spent more time in aimless space. He pushed his lower lip out slightly and drew it back slowly while exhaling; letting the lazy gust of air lift strands of his hair, revealing more of his forehead, much more pale than his arms.

 

He was startled when there was a bang on his door, followed by the voice of his friend, Val.

 

“LORY! Pssst! “ She knocked a bit softer, but with more rapidity. “Pssst c’mon I know you’re awake!” She had a panicked tone but also a feeling of excitement in he voice.

 

Loren sat up quickly once he heard the bang and her voice. He hopped off the bed and came to the door, pressing his palm against the right panel. The doorway was open within a blink of an eye as the slab slid to the side.

 

“Val??” Loren half-whispered and narrowed his eyes a bit, poking his head out in the humming hallway of the hull; looking left and right before holding her wrist and helping her through the door. “What is it?? We can’t be walking around after evening education..” he spoke with slight hesitation at having called it ‘education.’

 

“I know, I know but the word has been travelling fast..! They plan to let us all out in the next Sanctuary world! No more lotteries or raffles! “ She beamed and held his shoulders, shaking him slightly.

 

“Err…wh..what? “ Loren blinked and slowly raised his hands to take a hold of her wrists, gently lowering her arms down to their waist level. “Hold on..relax, Val. Rumors like this have gone on for probably who knows how long..!” He whispered slightly annoyed, but careful not to offend her.

 

“Shh, Lory believe me..! “ She beamed again, her eyes were shaking in both excitement and in response to a build up of tears in her tear ducts. “Someone overheard the committee communications directly..!! This time, we can trust the rumor to be truth.” She winked and slapped Loren’s arm playfully. “Ha! You were right, I guess I should have looked at things more positively after all!” She sighed in relief.

 

“Ha, yeah I told you…!” Loren smiled back, hiding his apprehension. “Positive…” He traced his eyes to the side and peered down towards his feet and then stumbled back, his face burning. “WHERE ARE YOUR PANTS?? “

 

“Oh..HAHA.” Val noticed she had just her underwear on, besides her undershirt. “Well at least you can’t say I’m a liar since I don’t have any pants on!” She laughed.

 

 

 

The vessel continued to drag itself across the dark waves, unrelented by the debris that smashed harmlessly against its hull. At the stern of the vessel, tucked neatly at the tail, was a scout ship resting comfortabely.

[ChidoriOokami]

For now, the diary entries may fit what you are trying to convey. Later on, as the story progresses, and you want to go into more depth, they may not fit as well, only you as the writer can know that. I find the snippets pretty interesting right now, introducing each character in that way has worked thus far in keeping me engaged.

 

As for stepping things up, for me at least, it depends on what my muse is up to. Lately she has been hitting me over the head pretty hard and I tend to write a lot, but then I hit dry streaks where I actually have to take a break and can't post as often. It's not something that can be forced, I just have to take advantage when the mood strikes.

 

For others, they may do the words per day goal that they set, I know someone who only writes on Sunday, so it is different for everyone. Just do what works for you and so far it is working just fine.

 

Thank you Misha!

 

Yeah I was thinking about that a lot too..about what it will be like when it progresses, and how long I want the series to be.. thanks for the input!!

 

Also yeah, I uess it's the same for a lot of people when it comes to when we feel or not feel like writing..but I bet with the upcoming Rogue 1 Movie...well, we might all get a mega boost!

[wangxiuming]

 

At the stern of the vessel, tucked neatly at the tail, was a scout ship resting comfortabely.

 

 

Ho ho ... I wonder who could be in there.

 

Another interesting entry. Loren and Val's exchange sound so natural, their friendship really comes across. Looking forward to more. You weren't kidding about upping your game.

[JennyFlynn]

I know it is kind of slow doing it this way...i read everyone else's stories and the chapters have so much depth, detail, star'noir and richness xD The more I read everyone's stories I feel like I'm needing to step up things including how often I can add entries ^^

 

You don't have to do anything you don't want to do. This is your story, your baby, the place where you do what best fits your personal style. I personally write when the mood strikes.. this includes when I wake up at night with a single line running through my mind and open up google docs on my phone to jot it down. I am still learning, I still spend most of my time reading and re-reading, scrapping stuff and adding things before finally posting with great hesitation because I know which other writers are out there and I know I'm not even close to their level. But I do it anyways because I enjoy it, because I like to write and even if no one reads it.. it's still an outlet for me. And try hard not to think of others' stories and talent when you write because I've ran myself into a wall in the past doing so. Hell I just tossed 10+ chapters of my own story out and began rewriting them because I struggle but it's a learning experience too. Enjoy yourself and just do what you do, the way that feels right for you. Now excuse me while I go read your new addition lol.

Edited November 22, 2016 by JennyFlynn

[JennyFlynn]

That was a precious addition to the story, I appreciate the chemistry between Loren and Val. It's nice they're building up a good friendship under the circumstances they're both in and I'm crossing my fingers that what Val said isn't a mere rumor. That scout ship though..

 

Nice work Chidori.

[Lunafox]

I enjoy the quick reads. Sometimes I'm just passing through and it's nice to have something you can absorb quickly. Diary format is nice, because it's more intimate in my thinking, and you're doing a fine job with it.

 

I echo Misha in that it depends on what your muse wants, and if you find that you want to take the story beyond diary entries, you can do that. Anything is possible, enjoy yourself, you'll know if it feels right. Keep it up!

[MishaCantu]

Sanctuary planet, huh? We will see, and the little scout ship attached, this could lead to something quite interesting. It was rather amusing to me that Val was basically saying she couldn't possibly be hiding anything because she didn't even have pants on. Nice interaction.

 

I am still very much enjoying the tiny peeks inside your characters heads.

Edited November 22, 2016 by MishaCantu

[ChidoriOokami]

Ho ho ... I wonder who could be in there.

 

Another interesting entry. Loren and Val's exchange sound so natural, their friendship really comes across. Looking forward to more. You weren't kidding about upping your game.

 

Thanks Wang Everyone's super encouraging.

 

Ooh and yes, Honestly I didn't expect it to go quite this way, like in terms of giving a feeling of SOME depth to val and Loren's history. It sort of wrote itself I think.

 

What do YOU do when you plan something, then all of a suddent want to change directions? Did it pay off to stick to the plan, or follow the instinct, or Muse (as Misha/Luna/Jen pointed out) ...

 

That was a precious addition to the story, I appreciate the chemistry between Loren and Val. It's nice they're building up a good friendship under the circumstances they're both in and I'm crossing my fingers that what Val said isn't a mere rumor. That scout ship though..

 

Nice work Chidori.

 

 

Hi and Thanks Jenny!

 

Yeah regarding what you said about the story being one's own baby-- I think you're right. I don't have any kids (yet??) but I do kind of think about how it might be like, thinking about all the uncertainties, but wanting the best for my child. It does actually help me to think about my stories that way, surprisingly...as I write this haha.

 

Oh yes thank you I agree, they seem to have good chemistry and it did actually feel very touching as I wrote it T_T maybe because I felt guilty/responsible for what has happened before and whatever will happen in the future. I didn't want anything to happen badly. That line between reader and writer hit me there I guess >_<

 

I enjoy the quick reads. Sometimes I'm just passing through and it's nice to have something you can absorb quickly. Diary format is nice, because it's more intimate in my thinking, and you're doing a fine job with it.

 

 

 

I echo Misha in that it depends on what your muse wants, and if you find that you want to take the story beyond diary entries, you can do that. Anything is possible, enjoy yourself, you'll know if it feels right. Keep it up!

 

 

Hi Luna! I have been reading your stories along with the others and I admit that I try to draw some inspiration from how everyone words things. The balance between looking outwardly and inwardly when writing ;o it's really cool how I can see it used all over yours and others' writings :'D

 

Thanks for the encouragments ^^

 

Sanctuary planet, huh? We will see, and the little scout ship attached, this could lead to something quite interesting. It was rather amusing to me that Val was basically saying she couldn't possibly be hiding anything because she didn't even have pants on. Nice interaction.

 

I am still very much enjoying the tiny peeks inside your characters heads.

 

Hi Misha!

 

Hehe yes, that last part is kind of a hinty xD

 

Oh and yeah! Haha actually I didn't even think of it quite that way, regarding her pants...err lack of pants. I was more thinking along the times of "liar liar pants on fire" being invalid since she had none on. Haha Thanks for an alternate, and deeper perspective

 

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Thank you Everyone <3

 

Also yes, I'm happy about the format as it is too. I know that like you guys said, it may need to change later on...but like that dark silent ocean, endless and infinite in form...hopefully my imagination will take a similar cue and make it work for as long as possible.

Edited November 22, 2016 by ChidoriOokami

[ChidoriOokami]

Entry #8 Kalyn'Yun Akura CS-3

Catagory: Short Story

 

Disclaimer: I would like to humbly request for this entry that you also listen to

to help provide the atmosphere of the opening scene. You don't have to do so, nor listen to it all for the duration of the entry but I did have this in mind when I created it : )

 

Guilty to All Except One

 

 

Dawn.

 

The towering skyscrapers which owned the skies over Coruscant. A Republic Flag that had seen many sunrises, many sunsets and if given the chance to speak would perhaps have not even the words to express its thoughts – was being raised.

 

Below the now fully raised flag was the Galactic Republic Supreme Court.

 

Within its halls, was one reserved for only the Trials that were of the highest profile. The room itself was bathed in marble, structured by metal; majesty adorning material that was just as likely to be used in all manners of violence—weapons and war. To further the façade of honor in place of cold disparity, Republic Judicial armed guards stood at well spaced intervals against the walls of the chamber; inside and out. Their faces were either cold or stern with an almost lost sense of obedience hammered in by futility.

 

There was a small audience. Mainly government officials, including several sectors of the Intelligence cadres. They all had similar faces as of the guards who sentineled the chamber. Some had smug looks, while some had worried frowns between their occasional clearing of the throat or forehead rubbing.

 

Seven judges sat atop the ivory benches, a considerable stature that gave one the sense of impending judgment and scrutiny. Every piece of clothing was tight, prim and without a wrinkle or crease. Every uniform was decorated, every guardian’s weapon shined as if never expecting to be used or give the impression of previous use.

 

 

Finally, there was the hallway. The floor itself was also bathed in marble, a shade of sapphire. It was impressively long as it was meant to give some time for the accused to think no doubt about his or her actions or perhaps death.

 

The sounds of cased boots, in unison walking down the hard marble surface and their reflections slightly distorted though apperant, could be seen by simply looking down. These guards were clad in Republic blue, blasters holstered and caps navy white. Four of them surrounded the female, who still in her seemingly worn uniform was making the journey down the hall. Her dark violet hair was tied behind her in a ponytail, her boots – more worn than her escorts made a much softer sound on the hard surface beneath her feet.

 

She looked straight ahead, her lips pursed and not held too tight. She exhaled slowly through her nose and clenched her fists in front of her, which were both hemmed close together thanks to her shackles. She soon relaxed her fists and exhaled one more time, deeply from her mouth—letting the air barely escape the crack made available by her lips.

 

She finally reached the quiet chamber, and as customary upon the entry of the accused on trial – all the sentries in the room click their boots and gripped their blaster rifles, smacking the butts of their war sticks down onto the ground. This signaled the sealed fate of one who would face judgment – Guilt or Innocence.

 

“The Trial of Kalyn’Yun Akura. Arrested and being charged with several felonies that include: Unsanctioned military leave, Disruption of the peace, smuggling of goods, falsifying of evidence, falsely personating a Republic Intelligence officer, Threatening of military and or government officials, and High Treason against the Galactic Republic. “ Voiced one of the court officials standing next to the judges.

 

As she took her place before the seven, she raised her head and smirked as the court official had finished his statement.

 

She leveled her gaze. The sun’s rays illuminated the building's interior and cast Kalyn’s shadow along the ground and against the wall, her shadow’s head towering high, reaching just below the Republic flag that hung over the whole chamber.

 

“Guilty to all except one, Your Honours. “ Her voice was steady.

Edited November 22, 2016 by ChidoriOokami

[MishaCantu]

So much detail in the description of the Justice Center, I could envision it very well in my mind. I especially liked this phrase:

 

A Republic Flag that had seen many sunrises, many sunsets and if given the chance to speak would perhaps have not even the words to express its thoughts – was being raised.

 

 

I actually have the Justice Center coming up in one of my future chapters, lol, although I am sure my description will be much less elegant.

 

 

Waiting to see how Kalyn gets herself out of this one.

[wangxiuming]

What do YOU do when you plan something, then all of a suddent want to change directions? Did it pay off to stick to the plan, or follow the instinct, or Muse (as Misha/Luna/Jen pointed out) ...

 

For the False Empire, I started with a big picture plan already in place. I knew what the main story beats, climaxes and revelations would be and approximately when they would happen. I haven't really strayed from that initial plan too much. The stuff that has changed is the road between each of the big events.

 

If I haven't mentioned it before, False Empire was intended to be more novella-length in the beginning (around 30-40K words). My initial goal was to structure it similar to my previous story, False Sith, which was separated into 3 Parts with 5 chapters each. As I began writing, however, I soon discovered that there was just no way I could develop the characters like I wanted to in such few words. And thus, Part 1 of False Empire ballooned into ~50K words and 15+ chapters by itself. I think it worked out better this way, but man, have I been writing that thing forever. =X

 

“The Trial of Kalyn’Yun Akura. Arrested and being charged with several felonies that include: Unsanctioned military leave, Disruption of the peace, smuggling of goods, falsifying of evidence, falsely personating a Republic Intelligence officer, Threatening of military and or government officials, and High Treason against the Galactic Republic. “ Voiced one of the court officials standing next to the judges.

 

As she took her place before the seven, she raised her head and smirked as the court official had finished his statement.

 

She leveled her gaze. The sun’s rays illuminated the building's interior and cast Kalyn’s shadow along the ground and against the wall, her shadow’s head towering high, reaching just below the Republic flag that hung over the whole chamber.

 

“Guilty to all except one, Your Honours. “ Her voice was steady.

 

This is such a good hook! Fantastic way to suck us readers into the story, kudos!

 

I also liked the atmospheric music. I debated including musical links in some of my chapters too, but I could never sync music up with the story to my liking. I think you chose an excellent companion piece for this chapter though.

Edited November 22, 2016 by wangxiuming

[ChidoriOokami]

So much detail in the description of the Justice Center, I could envision it very well in my mind. I especially liked this phrase:

 

Quote:

A Republic Flag that had seen many sunrises, many sunsets and if given the chance to speak would perhaps have not even the words to express its thoughts – was being raised.

 

 

 

Waiting to see how Kalyn gets herself out of this one.

 

Hi Misha!

 

Thanks! I would have assumed the Star’Noir would bring in the court system ^^ which the story style itself needing no extra flare since you’ve chosen a unique genre I couldn’t make a Star’Noir even If I wanted to because I have very little experience in watching them >_<

 

Oh and yes, Kalyn’s story seems to promise more and more detail in very small burst of storytelling lol

 

 

 

This is such a good hook! Fantastic way to suck us readers into the story, kudos!

 

I also liked the atmospheric music. I debated including musical links in some of my chapters too, but I could never sync music up with the story to my liking. I think you chose an excellent companion piece for this chapter though.

 

Hi Wang!

 

First of all thank you for your thoughts! I always wondered what it would be like to try and professionally pursue a career in writing, or at least publishing lol it’s not exactly a sure fire way of making a living..BUT it would be so enjoyable. Student loans will haunt me forever…

 

Also thank you^^ her development has made me excited too! I don’t really plan on making musical tracks a heavy part of my entries either it’s just I felt like the entry would be a bit drawn out especially since her story seems o be taking the longest to lift off—I thought adding a track would help refresh the reader’s perspective of her situation

[JennyFlynn]

Oh wow, I was completely taken with the way you described the justice building. So much attention to detail, very nice touch and the music really accentuated everything.

 

I have to say I'm enjoying Kalyn's strong attitude and I wonder which charge is the false one. Either way I'd love to see where she goes next.

[ChidoriOokami]

Oh wow, I was completely taken with the way you described the justice building. So much attention to detail, very nice touch and the music really accentuated everything.

 

I have to say I'm enjoying Kalyn's strong attitude and I wonder which charge is the false one. Either way I'd love to see where she goes next.

 

HI Jen!

 

Thanks! I knew that since i write in entries, that I try to make up for length by at least giving one or two vivid images ^^ also i'm glad the track helped rather than damaged the experience >_<

 

Let's see next time what happens to Ms. Akura lol

[ChidoriOokami]

Entry #9 Val Var'Tan CS-Bonus-Intro

Catagory: Journal-Extra

 

Disclaimer: I Hope you all have Happy Thanksgiving : ) This is a bonus entry that peeks into a file of Val Var'Tan -- Loren's friend

 

I Am Thankful

 

Dear Holo Diary,

 

Hehe this is probably the best thing I’ve had to say since, I can’t even remember! I heard from Maz’Kan that the committee members of the ship have finally decided to do what I think was most the practical and just about the best most humane thing one could ever do for misfortune people!

 

Finally, a world we can settle into and not having to wake up to the hums of this metal heap again..

 

I was so excited that I had to run over to Lory’s and tell him the good news. I wish …I wish he could know how thankful I am ..I mean…for everything.

 

Haha I remember the first day I saw him. He came in a few months after I did. Hehe He looked so cute and handsome with his hair shorter and even clean new clothes. He seemed to have had some high hopes early on and it sort of helped me feel at least a little bit more hopeful.

 

I guess I can say that I’m happier than just about anyone here since I’ll be starting a new life and with a close friend.

 

That dummy didn’t even bat much an eye at me either, even with my pants off. Hmph.

 

I’ll slap his head tomorrow after lunch haha!

 

 

Val

11.24

The Sanctuary V

Edited November 24, 2016 by ChidoriOokami

[MishaCantu]

What a sweet journal entry, definitely fits the holiday. It is nice to see Val retain her optimism about better days ahead, and it also seems Val is a little smitten with Loren.

 

A lovely idea, thanks for sharing.

[JennyFlynn]

What a cute idea to slip in a little holiday themed entry! It's nice to see someone like Val keep her spirits up like that and I also think she's most definitely crushing on Loren.

[ChidoriOokami]

What a sweet journal entry, definitely fits the holiday. It is nice to see Val retain her optimism about better days ahead, and it also seems Val is a little smitten with Loren.

 

A lovely idea, thanks for sharing.

 

What a cute idea to slip in a little holiday themed entry! It's nice to see someone like Val keep her spirits up like that and I also think she's most definitely crushing on Loren.

 

Happy Thanksgiving you guys ^^

 

Yeah, Val couldn't be happier at this point and only assuming the best for her future, she has nothing but thankfulness inside of her right now.

 

Ooh and yes, it seems she does hope to stick close to Loren, eh? lol

 

Time will tell

 

Gobble Gobble ^^

[ChidoriOokami]

Entry #10 Hovivic Windfire CS-3

Catagory: Journal

 

Disclaimer:

 

Boredom is a Curious Device

 

 

Holo Journal,

 

It has been perhaps nearly 16 hours and so far everything has gone smoothly. I admit that when I first ran into this cargo vessel I considered boarding it to have a look around. After that consideration I decided that it may first be to my benefit to hitch a ride at least for a while.

 

I have been passing some time by attempting to sleep. Many attempts that were met with failure. I have found at least some entertainment in days old hyper communications. It's pretty interesting to listen to some of the chatter going in the hundreds and thousands of broadcasts that go as far as the core worlds to some of the outer rim worlds.

 

Heh, to think that I almost turned down the deal that rewarded me with this device; this savior of boredom. Come to think...the Jawa that I bargained with was part of a small cadre of Jawa on Hoth. The sad soul had been starving for a while and didn't really appeal to Wampa jerky or Frozen TaunTaun milk. He was practically starving. I had a bit of ration left, enough to last me to the end of my trek across the white, cold and barren desert. I figured I may have been able to last longer without the ration than him, so I decided to strike a bargain. I suppose it was the "Inner Jedi" in me that encouraged me to give my food freely. Nah. Surely he had things to trade. Why else would a Jawa be conversing with anyone.

 

Ha, his inventory was quite amusing actually. He rolled out his items and among them I found a few worn out saber hilts and damaged vibro swords. Obviously a large portion of his "merchandise" at least in this rotation was sourced by the civil war and perhaps skirmishes with Zakuulans. I found one of those strange looking bronze helmets that their knights wear. I opted to take the more modest, curious looking device. The Jawa told me it was for information and communications tapping. I didn't know anything about splicing. I figured the device could benefit me somehow though.

 

Caught his name, was Mizz...or Grizz...Dizz...Brizz! ... Something like that. His cadre of Jawa had some kind of dispute with another faction on the planet I think. I can't really remember.

 

I'm hearing all kinds of news on this thing, the farther out I tune it, the farther planets it can reach. However, I suppose because of its size and maybe...quality...the farther planets take a while to rebound messages, so I get the communications perhaps a day late or so. Still, they make for very interesting listens.

 

I even tried using it on this cargo ship. Since I'm literally attached to it--docked at its stern-- I can monitor a lot of the chatter inside, even some of the personal holo-meetings that take place in what i believe to be its officer deck. I was right to assume this was some kind of refugee ship.

 

Or at least I would be right, if I were to ask the captain and staff of the ship. These poor souls. This ship isn't what it seems, nor perhaps what the people in the hull think it to be.

 

Not really my problem.

 

But I don't know how much longer I can stay on this scout ship. I'd love to stretch my feet.

 

H. Windfire

11.19

Class II Scout Ship

Star Iridion

Edited November 29, 2016 by ChidoriOokami

[JennyFlynn]

I enjoyed the little reminiscing Hovi did about who I can only assume to be Blizz He's such a favorite.

 

Definitely convinced now that he's docked on the same ship Val and Loren are on but the communication he's overheard seem concerning. I hope they'll be okay.

 

Nicely done! I really am loving these little snippets.

[MishaCantu]

A device like that can be helpful in so many ways, but may also get information a person doesn't necessarily want to hear. Loved the homage to Blizz, like Jenny, he is definitely one of my favorite companions too. I do wonder what sorts of shenanigans Hovi will get into if they do decide to stretch those feet.

 

As usual, I do enjoy peeking into the journals.

[Lunafox]

I concur with Misha and Jenny. I'm enjoying these quick read entries very much, they're very personal. And like the others also said, it was a nice touch having the holiday entry. Also like the others, Blizz is a favorite and I look forward to seeing what comes next.

[ChidoriOokami]

I enjoyed the little reminiscing Hovi did about who I can only assume to be Blizz He's such a favorite.

 

Definitely convinced now that he's docked on the same ship Val and Loren are on but the communication he's overheard seem concerning. I hope they'll be okay.

 

Nicely done! I really am loving these little snippets.

 

Hi Jenny!

 

Haha Yes, I love Blizz <3

Oh and thank you for your comment the snippets make it fun and entertaining for me! Also they use up what little reserves of thought I have left after doing some kind of errand or assignment xD

 

We'll have to see what happens next ~

 

A device like that can be helpful in so many ways, but may also get information a person doesn't necessarily want to hear. Loved the homage to Blizz, like Jenny, he is definitely one of my favorite companions too. I do wonder what sorts of shenanigans Hovi will get into if they do decide to stretch those feet.

 

As usual, I do enjoy peeking into the journals.

 

Hi Lady Misha!

 

Yes, interesting of you to point out ^^ I realized midway that the device itself was kind of dangerous..

 

Ooh and Yes, This is meant to still be -- err well the timeline I think everyone has already figured out, but it will be made even more clear later! I feel like I have not explored much of Hovi yet so I look forward to seeing more of his mind too! --when he stretches his feet..

 

I concur with Misha and Jenny. I'm enjoying these quick read entries very much, they're very personal. And like the others also said, it was a nice touch having the holiday entry. Also like the others, Blizz is a favorite and I look forward to seeing what comes next.

 

Hi Lady Luna!

 

I agree with everyone about Blizz ^^ he is such an awesome character, and I wanted to include him at least indirectly at some point like I did here!

 

Also thank you again for the comment! I know the overall story is going very slowly due to the style of the entries, but yes I hope everyone can enjoy the entries as independent pieces like I do <3 They let me think of all sorts of things outside and inside what has already happened, or what could happen.