Why don't countion on with my story I read and tell what chacher to add in. It would help me from good writer and u can rewrite 1st two chaper of the story. I can give you the the plot and u add u idea and I tell u my. It would help become a better writer. Is that aright.

U have amite I done lot better than my last story. Thanks you for your trying to help me. Now which senctere make corrcet on and add more thing in if think not enough My frist is english. Just not good writing out

I hope Scourge will kill Jaesa casue really I hate her dark side. (Not like you are going make that happen but I can dream) I like her better when she is light side

Here Link to my Story im working on http://www.swtor.com/community/showthread.php?p=4870122#post4870122 Casue no one seen to pay attation to it and if it my write u guys can help by telling my mistake and I will fix them. It would help come out to be a better writer

"Bryan what are during here last time I check you were going to start a new life" said Orgus Kira and Mary were stunted had did masters din know this man and why did Orgus know him very well. “Well I got board on Hoth and decide to come to Alderaan and help and there lot trouble here” said Bryan “and beside I was Freeze *** back on Hoth and really want to get off it anyway” add in. Kira laugh at that and Mary putting her hands on her head and Orgus did too and Bryan looks like hurt. “What jedi still have no hummer beside Kira here” said Bryan in putting his hand over his heart Kira then stop laughing and Mary and Orgus turn to him in shock how did Bryan knew Kira “Wait how do know me have we meet before” said Kira look at Bryan waiting for an answer from him. “Well we meet back once when try to steal my Blaster's and try to run back to your friend on Nar Sharren 3 years ago” said Bryan looking through his mask. Then Bryan lifts his hand and reaches for his mask and took it off and putting it back in his bag. Kira is more stunted then before and it took all her jedi training not ran over and jumped in his arms. Instead Kira ask ”Jim is that really you” “Yeah it me but u know now my named is Bryan and not Jim.” said Bryan looking worried that Kira is going shout at him. But till his surprise Mary who shout angry at him “Ok that it Master how do know him and why.” “The Jedi Masters Never told her who I was do you” said Bryan in angry tone that surprise all people in the room and look at master din waiting for an answer him. Finally Orgus answer “no the jedi Council through that if Mary did not know you it would best for her.” Master Din looked sad when he said that and Bryan knew that it was not his fault. “What was best for herself or for the jedi” said Bryan an add in “You know what I’m not surprise at all the Jedi Council were allow ******e beside you Master and Satele.” Mary thought her Master is hiding someting and this man some how knew her. But if he is former jedi why did come here on a jedi misson just save herself and Kira. Some how Bryan Knew casue he answer " why would I save you Mary casue you unlike the jedi ******e I am going to tell you". He walk over to her and said one word that surprise her "Casue Im your older brother" Autor Note: Now that suprise was it. Here the thing I don't like jedi that much casue of there jedi code and I alway thought of the Council as ******e (Beside Satele shan and Orgus Din) and they think of Grey jedi as bad guys when they are not. Autor Note2:Vote still to decide Orgus Din fate.

Are going to add the jedi knight in the story. If you are u can use my guy. Name:Bryan Hughes Class:jedi sentinel Alightment:Grey side Romance: Kira carsen

It good that Mitka has good family. I feel bad that people treat her badly just casus she sith pureblood. one qustion those: Are Shiloh and Quinn going end up togerher or just be Friend;) Ardyth still not liking her and you made hate Pierce in this story. (casue I like him more then with did Quinn anyway) Still feel bad for Quinn and hope he won't kill Mitka that would be sad:(

I never like Quinn. But your Story made me feel bad for him and hell he do not dervse this:( That Ardyth is **** up person I hope She slow painfull death soon. I feel very bad for Shiloh. She just her lost love and she going have a slow recovery.

Chapter 1 On Alderaan Kira and her master Mary Hughes where heading to Mensaav Laboratory. Both were breath hard from running they were doing and Kira just drop knee. "Kira we need to keep going or Doctor Parvux going be Killiks next meal" shouted Mary offer her hand to her. Take her hand and got off her feet and said "aright Master let go" So they battle to Mensaav Laboratory Mary cut Killiks with her twin green lightsaber and Kira with her blue doublesaber. Just then Kria and Mary finding a sealed door at the end of the complex. Mary attempted to force it upon. As the door open. Mary saw lightsaber strike incoming to and use force call one of her lightsaber to her hand to block lightsaber strike. Then attarker knew who it was put away his lightsaber. Mary then knew it was her former master Orgus Din "Heh...what took you so long?" ask Orgus in friendly tone "Sorry Master all the speeders were taken" joked Mary and Kira laugh little. "I let go, but only this once" said Orgus getting the joke. Kira check to see Orgus taking big breath and said "You looked better, Master. Sure you're aright?". "I've looked worse Kira" said Orgus knowing Kira worried about him and add "I'll be fine. As Mary and Kira walk into the room the notioc a Male Zarbark that had to be Doctor Parvux. "Blasted sith almost kill me." said Orgus aggressive and walk over Zarbark and Orgus added "Was all I could do to save Doctor Parvux" "Hello Doctor Parvux are aright" ask Mary in worried tone. "The enemy lefts us here as food for the Killiks but im fine jedi" repiled the Doctor Parvux "Taking down that Killik leader must have been quite a fight." said Orgus in a pround tone and add in "Thing was huge. Mary look around confused and said "Master I don't know what you talking about." Kira look around too and add in "yeah Master Din we did not see any huge Killiks" Orgus was now confused too and said "The Killik leading others. You did't see it?" Then a wall far right stated shaking and they all heard a nosie of a Killik. All three Jedi walk over to the and they took out there lightsaber "If that thing eats us...you've fired" said Orgus in joke tone. Then Huge Killik came out and attarck. Orgus is taking care of other Kilike while Mary and Kira were taking leader on Kira change at leader in a aggressive lightsaber form the Ataru and Mary can up behind use both her green lightsaber in Jar'Kai form. Leader block their attarck and attrack with his two Vibroblade. Kira duck and Mary force jump and Throw her off-hand lightsaber at it but leader blocked it and Change at Mary and silch her waist and Kira force push leader and Kira run to Mary side. "Mary are u aright" said Kira clearly worried about her. "I be fine Kira" said Mary trying smile but moan in pain Leader Change at both fallen jedi and Kira took her lightsaber getting ready to defend her master. But then a nosie of Blaster pistol hit the head the Killik leader kill it Kira and Mary turn see where Blast came from. Only to see mask man round about their age holding two Blaster pistol in his hand. The Mask Man walk over to two and said "A you girls aright". "Im fine but my master need see a healer" said Kira looking down at her master Mary was about to she was fine but moan in pain again and Mask Man put his wepon back hold and said "It look that" Then Orgus ran over to them and looking worried and said "Are you both aright." "Your friend here need to a healer as soon your all get out of here" said Mask Man point at Mary. Orgus look at Mask man and Kira saw Orgus shock face on this mask man "Bryan is that you" said Orgus still stunt and Mary and Kira now shock too. How did Master Din know this man. "Good to see you too master" said Mask man now named Bryan

Summery: Kira and Mary were saved form Killik Leader by a mask man named Bryan. Why did he risk Life to save these jedi and why does Master Orgus Din know him. Pairing: Kira/OC Doc/FemaleJK Autor Note: It been a while before chaper will up so stay with me Note2:should I Kill Orgus Din or keep him alive.

No that mean I need u help. like what need add in to make more sence it help me along the I try get better word processor

Well did say im not good at write a story but try best I can ok. But you could help this finsh this story and maybe and write on my own see what happen ok. im using wordpad to write this out Thanks.

On the Defender Kira was meditate in her quarters until someone knock on her door. She got up check who at the door. Kira was shocked to see it was her former master Sarah Gery “Sarah do want to talk about something?". Sarah Gery smile and said "I just want to talk to u Kira about something". “What do want to talk about Sarah” said Kira and Kira noice that Sarah look nervous. Kira was shocked to see her master nervous. Sarah was never nervous about anything “I just want to talk about u being jedi knight now and how do feel about it” said Sarah rubber back of head . Kira was growing more concerned. Sarah know how she feel about her being jedi knight and she just that as exuse not tell way she really want to said wanted to say. “Sarah don't way do really came.” Kira said worried. “Yeah Kira your right that way I really came down here." she said looking scared. But then she ran her hand down Kira’s arm. “come here and show u.” she pull her arms and kiss her lips. Kira was suprise but then she give in to kiss. Sarah pull away and brush and nervous. “Kira Im Im so sorry I should not....” Sarah started but she cut off by kira grabbing her around the waist and lifted her off her feet and kissong her agian . Kira then let her down and said “I think u are cute when nervous Sarah and I think look beautiful master so came here .” Kira pulling Sarah in her arm again and kiss neck this time. Sarah moaned and Kira lift her up again and she carring her to bed. They fell and sarah was on top of kira then she bent down kiss kira again. Kira put arms her around Sarah waist. Kira then began remove Sarah's Belt and Sarah remove Kira robe. :2 Hours later: Sarah was laying on top of kira naked and tried. She watched her breath, her eyes were closed, she thought Kira was sleeping, “Glad we got that out way. who all fun in the anticpaptiobn was just Lazy” He said. “You said it.” Sarah agreed. Sarah look up and smile and kiss Kira again. "I love you Kira when frist meet u and alway will". she said “I love u too Sarah” said Kira. "Sarah Can ask someting?". She asked . “Sure" said Sarah. “where are T7 and C3PO,” She asked and look at her former master eyes “Well let just said I send out somewhere on a imporrtion misson.” She answered chuckling. :Meanwhile With T7 and C3PO on tatioone: Three women where had cleaning rag and giving T7 a shine “T7 should not get these item back to our master soon.” said C3PO T7 Ignore him and conuite getting shine by three women.

This first story so go easy on me and any corrcet I can make I will I would Like all your support os I can better story

This is my frist story go easy me. Kira and female jedi knight story On the Defender Kira was meditate in her quarters until someone knock on her door. She got up check who at the door. Kira was shocked to see it was her former master Sarah Gery “Sarah do want to talk about something?". Sarah Gery smile and said "I just want to talk to u Kira about something". “What do want to talk about Sarah” said Kira and Kira noice that Sarah look nervous. Kira was shocked to see her master nervous. Sarah was never nervous about anything “I just want to talk about u being jedi knight now and how do feel about it” said Sarah rubber back of head . Kira was growing more concerned. Sarah know how she feel about her being jedi knight and she just that as exuse not tell way she really want to said wanted to say. “Sarah don't way do really came.” Kira said worried. “Yeah Kira your right that way I really came down here." she said looking scared. But then she ran her hand down Kira’s arm. “come here and show u.” she pull her arms and kiss her lips. Kira was suprise but then she give in to kiss. Sarah pull away and brush and nervous. “Kira Im Im so sorry I should not....” Sarah started but she cut off by kira grabbing her around the waist and lifted her off her feet and kissong her agian . Kira then let her down and said “I think u are cute when nervous Sarah and I think look beautiful master so came here .” Kira pulling Sarah in her arm again and kiss neck this time. Sarah moaned and Kira lift her up again and she carring her to bed. They fell and sarah was on top of kira then she bent down kiss kira again. Kira put arms her around Sarah waist. Kira then began remove Sarah's Belt and Sarah remove Kira robe. :2 Hours later: Sarah was laying on top of kira naked and tried. She watched her breath, her eyes were closed, she thought Kira was sleeping, “Glad we got that out way. who all fun in the anticpaptiobn was just Lazy” He said. “You said it.” Sarah agreed. Sarah look up and smile and kiss Kira again. "I love you Kira when frist meet u and alway will". she said “I love u too Sarah” said Kira. "Sarah Can ask someting?". She asked . “Sure" said Sarah. “where are T7 and C3PO,” She asked and look at her former master eyes “Well let just said I send out somewhere on a imporrtion misson.” She answered chuckling. :Meanwhile With T7 and C3PO on tatioone: Three women where had cleaning rag and giving T7 a shine “T7 should not get these item back to our master soon.” said C3PO T7 was Ignore and conuite getting shine by three women.

Im good coming up with plot but im at bad at it writing that all and I would like some help

guess u right im just not that good at writing that all

Not push RepublicGurl but U said have story by sunday well now it monday. is work keeping busy or just give up on it.

Good so far and I would like to see more story from u. Tell U friend to come forum to write story too. I check these story out every morining. I hope u keep writing here.

In This I would like people to write story (Long or short) Between Jedi Knight and jedi consular romance. Follow Pair I would like to see are: Jk/Kira Doc/Jk Doc/Kira JC/Nadia JC/Iresso Nadia/Iresso But u can writte what ever u want as long it inovled Jedi Knight and jedi consular. Follow rule are: 1:no anybody from empire side 2:Trooper or smugger can be invole as long family to Jedi Knight or jedi consular or any pair I listed. 3:No hash word to me or other peolpe. 4:No Flames Reson I stared this: Casue I See more about sith warroir and smugger than Jedi Knight and jedi consular. Im no good at write Fanfiction so ask people to help me out.

How can soon write that story

Sure I read that

Well I would like Story that they can hook up or they hook up and having having danger part in there relationship and kira qutoin about jedi code. Your should make Jk jealous of Kira (or Doc if Jk male) that would be good story to read

I would want somebody to write a short story about Kira/Doc cause can't find one anywhere or Jk/kira story. Casue Kira my fav compation to have and Doc too. It be cute to see those two together. Resons I can't casue not good at writing story I hope somebody will

Hi Bioware are u going add Grey choices and make so we can play as Grey jedi ,Trooper and Smuggler and Grey Sith, bounty hunter, imperial agent. Beause I would love to see that and for player to follow grey path and get gear that only grey player can wear. Also to effect the Class story on grey choice. Are going plan this or not? Please let me know soon