Love your story.
But a lot the Republic characters turned into cartoony villains a little to quickly for my liking just for the sake of having Trix be on the "good side". Like the whole pendulum shifted as soon as she switched sides, the Empire all of a sudden caring about civilian casualties and being the victims while the Republic is out to murder babies.
It's your story though, and you've done a great job with it. It just stood out to me because I always viewed Jace being way more pragmatic then murdering his own grandson over a woman he hasn't been with in over 30 years.
Can't wait for the next chapter